Short Sentences 

Before Wordy Paragraph                                                                                                                             10/17/18

To such people the murder mystery is realistic fantasy. It is realistic because the people in the murder mystery are as a general rule believable as people. They are not just made up pasteboard figures. It is also realistic because the character who is the hero, the character who solves the murder mystery, solves it not usually by trial and error and haphazard methods but by exercising a high degree of logic and reason. It is absolutely and totally essential that people who enjoy murder mysteries have an ad

miration for the human faculty of logic.

After 

With most people murder mystery is fantasy, which is realistic.  Its realistic because people are believable within murder mystery. They are not made up by made up figures. Its realistic because the character plays a hero role when the character who solves a murder mystery. Character does not  solve it by trial and error. Also the character exercises a high degree of reasoning’s. Its essential that people who love murder mysteries have desire for the human faculty of logic.

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Revision Strategy #1

My goal is to do more brainstorming and drafts  in order to work on my local and global revision. Brainstorming and doing drafts are very important to be because I gather my thoughts and ideas together. Also when I’m done doing my drafts I can go back and check my work to add more or fixed my writing like an essay. I could fixed the organization of the paper and the grammar and etc. I also I want to understand the overall concept and meaning of summary, paraphrase, quotation, analysis, and synthesis of relevant sources better to use in my writing. Summary, paraphrase, quotation, analysis, and synthesis can be used in my brainstorm that can help me organized my writing.    I’m working to achieve this goal by using quotations, paraphrases, and summaries more often in my paper. I really want to focus on those aspects towards my writing because I believed that will help be improve and strengthen my writing too. I planed to continue this goal my making sure I brainstorm and find more evidence in my first draft that I can support. Also I may continue to follow and revise my paper to make sure that there are no grammar mistakes. Finally, I would like to start with a good argument and back it up and support my argument.

 

“Naysayer”                                                                                                                                                  10/22/17

[TOPIC] Technology is beneficial towards students in school. I believed students can use technology as an advantage and through “emerging adulthood”. [RESTRICTION] If used correctly, mobile devices and the applications they support, will help prepare students for their future careers. [ILLUSTRATION] For example students can look up online what careers they are interested to learn about. [ANALYSIS] Integrating technology into the classroom is an effective way to connect with students of all learning styles. It gives students the opportunity to enhance the interaction with their classmates and instructors by encouraging collaboration. Technology use in the classroom also makes it fun for students. This help students become more motivated and engaged in the classroom.  [NAYSAYER]  Yet is it necessarily true that technology hurts students ability to learn? Is it always the case, as I have been suggesting, that technology can be beneficial to students in many ways. [CONCLUSION]  I believed that technology without a doubt has more benefits then negatives towards students in the classrooms.